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Kagekao looked out at the sky. It was a beautiful blue, fluffy white clouds drifted by the hot sun lazily. Birds sang their happy songs joyfully as they swooped through the air. It was midday; too soon to go out and ‘play.’

Kage was sitting on the roof of a house, just thinking to himself. His hood was down and his black and white striped scarf was flowing in the wind. He felt odd, like something was there, but then again it wasn’t. The feeling made him feel depressed and sad. He felt like he was forgetting something important, and he desperately wanted to remember it.

Someone else climbed onto the roof and approached him. Kage turned his head to see who it was. He turned and looked back at the sky when he saw who it was. The person had on a beige fur lined gray hoodie along with a fox mask. The face on the mask was happy, even though that’s not how he felt.

“何か間違った、カイ?” (Is there something wrong, Kai?) Kage inquired.

Kai waved his hand ‘No,’ then he stopped for a moment, and signaled with his sign language to talk to Kage.

‘Actually, I’m a bit worried about you, Kage.’ He said using his complicated mode of communication. Kage was looking at Kai to know what he was saying, but remained silent.

‘What’s wrong? All you’ve been doing recently was sitting by yourself; it’s not like you.’ Kai sat down next to Kage.

Kage sighed.

“わかんない; nothing big really happened recently to make me feel this way. I just feel like . . . I’m missing something, or forgetting something. Something is there, but I can’t quite grasp what it is.” (I don’t know.)

Kai didn’t respond, and they both sat in silence. After a few minutes, Kage stood up and began to walk away. Kai got up to follow, but Kage stopped him.

“I think I’d rather be alone, Kai.”

Kai stopped and sat back down, watching as Kage jumped from the roof to another and then out of sight.

* * *

Kagekao left the residential area and into the city area. He climbed onto the roof of one of the buildings, relying on the few shadows of the day to conceal himself. On the roof, he looked down at the people walking around. There were the streets with the cars on them, and then there was a small playground in a park.

In the playground there were humans. They were happy, chatting with each other and the children were playing on the playground. Watching the happy families he realized what’s been bothering him; his own family.

Kage couldn’t remember his own family. His mother, his father, these words brought nothing to his memory; no voices, no faces, no memories at all. Brother? Sister? These words brought no memory as well. Who knew, he might not even have parents, or siblings.

The farthest he could remember into his childhood was an old room at the top of an abandoned building. He couldn’t remember any others at all; at least, no friends or family. He couldn’t remember if they had gotten separated somehow, or if they abandoned him.

Kage took off his black and white mask and looked at it. And this mask; he couldn’t remember how he had gotten it either. He had had it for as long as he could remember, it felt like a part of him. Something in his mind told him to always wear it, so he did.

Kage put his mask back on. Next to that; why couldn’t he remember? Something must have happened to wipe his memory away, but of course, he couldn’t remember that either.

He concentrated, trying to dig up a memory, any memory, of his family; no success. Kage sighed again and looked up at the clouds; what had happened to him?
Chapter 1 - [link]

Short prologue is short. But then again; it's a prologue.

Finally got around to start this; although I don't know how many chapters there are yet because I haven't finished writing the summaries yet. But there are two parts, as you can see, this the prologue. Not quite a chapter, but an introduction.

Anyway, when writing the summaries; so many feels. Mah poor little Kage-sama ;_;


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Oh my gosh. This is so beautifully written- Kagekao's feelings are wonderfully portrayed, capturing my feelings for him. The description of the setting is also wonderfully ornate, making my feel like I am really there with him and Kai. I also love the use of Kage speaking his native language and the translation beside it, and Kai's method of communicating without sound. Lastly, the chapter picture really sets the mood for the entire piece without having to read a single word.
All in all, this chapter was amazing! Please keep writing; you really have the potential, and I would love to see more!
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RunsWithBooks Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013
I really enjoyed reading this, and I particularly enjoy how you incorporated a foreign language (or, rather, two) into this flawlessly. Something I noticed though... "It was a beautiful blue, fluffy white clouds drifted by the hot sun lazily." The comma placement here sounds like the sky is blue, and fluffy, and white. What you may want to do is just make one little change, "It was a beautiful blue, WITH fluffy white clouds [...] lazily." Other than that, your description is really good too. Great job, I'm excited to read the next part!
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GingaAkam Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Professional General Artist
:D thanks, I always enjoy constructive criticism
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RunsWithBooks Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013
You rock!
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NGDLF92 Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
I was orphaned as a kid so I get that feeling a lot
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opalnova3 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
psshh! sign language isn't that complicated... jk it is... I love how you added sign language in this story ^.^ I'm learning it to communicate with my deaf family members
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Owshewhat Featured By Owner May 26, 2013  Hobbyist
i never read prologues :D
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Scorpio1996 Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
;_; I'll keep reading...
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PhoenixOfWildfires Featured By Owner May 12, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oh, the feels!
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:squee:Story time! IT'S STORY TIME!
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GingaAkam Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Professional General Artist
:D yes, yes it is; everyday at around 11 pm (Japan time) :3
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theflotinghead Featured By Owner May 13, 2013   General Artist
:DKeen!
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yendys16 Featured By Owner May 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
aww, the feels! Poor Kage :(
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Psychotic-Love Featured By Owner May 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
OMFG FINALLY!!!! I'M SO HAPPY I COULD PLAY GAMES WITH KAGE THEN I'D DIE AND GO TO HELL THEN I'D RUN STRAIGHT THROUGH HELL WITH A SMILE THEN I'D MEET THE DEVIL AND WE'D HOLD A PARTY AND BECOME BFFS THEN HE'D GIVE ME BACK MY LIFE THEN I'D WALK THROUGH THE STREETS SINGING "ANOTHER WAY OUT" THEN I'D WALK TO SOME RANDOM GUY AND GIVE HIM MY NUMBER AND SHOUT! "HEY, I JUST MET YOU AND THIS IS CRAZY, BUT HERE'S MY NUMBER, SO CALL ME MAYBE!" :iconinuexcitedplz::iconomgboomplz:
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GingaAkam Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Professional General Artist
XD you're pretty happy aren't you
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Psychotic-Love Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
YESSSSS! FINALLY WE GET TO KNOW KAGE'S PAST! :iconinuexcitedplz:
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revengeraven Featured By Owner May 12, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
awwww, poor Kage
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Velvetein Featured By Owner May 12, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
this is slightly depressing.... ;A;
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SinBarreras Featured By Owner May 12, 2013
T.T Poor Kage....
Very well-written story though :D
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GingaAkam Featured By Owner May 12, 2013  Professional General Artist
:D thanks
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miimint Featured By Owner May 12, 2013
can't wait for the other parts! :love: Your stories are always so awesome that I'm addicted :D
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GingaAkam Featured By Owner May 12, 2013  Professional General Artist
:D thank you
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GhostfaceNikol Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
So much feels :iconcryforeverplz:
I'm so glad that you make'd another Kage's story! Your story's all ways being Awesome :icondashisawesome1plz::icondashisawesome2plz:
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GingaAkam Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Professional General Artist
:D thank you
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GhostfaceNikol Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Nope >:3
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piggypoggy Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
This is quite interesting, the scene where he longs to know of his past when he's in the park makes you question who Kage really is.
I feel as though that his past was too dangerous or traumatizing for him to live with and as a result he sealed them away.
It really makes you wonder as to how his abilities were given to him, where and how he got his mask, and who is identity is.
Dayum you did a good job.
TEACH ME.
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GingaAkam Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Professional General Artist
:D thank you
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piggypoggy Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
your welcome~
Um, I hope you don't mind, but I'm having a bit of trouble uploading my own creepypasta.
Every time I proofread it, I see that all of the " and the ' have been changed to a scrambled text.
Do you have an explanation as to why it does that?
Or am I saving the story as the wrong doc type?
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GingaAkam Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Professional General Artist
Hmm, are you uploading from a document or are you entering the text? I think I had the same problem when I first started uploading stories; I just use the enter text option and it works fine
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piggypoggy Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I uploaded the document so I guess that's it.
Thanks!
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19alexa99 Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
loved it! i think this is your best work yet!
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GingaAkam Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Professional General Artist
:D thanks
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19alexa99 Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Np :3
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starfighter101 Featured By Owner May 11, 2013
0.o looks like we might get Kage's back story :squee:
can't wait for the next chapter
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GingaAkam Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Professional General Artist
:D yep
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TheEscape5657 Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I feel sad for Kage now...... ;_;
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payeehay Featured By Owner May 11, 2013
New Ginga-story, awww yiss =D *fidgets in anticipation* This's gonna be good ^_^
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GingaAkam Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Professional General Artist
:D
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ProxyModel Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Poor Kage... very interesting prologue btw.
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GingaAkam Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Professional General Artist
:D thanks
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ProxyModel Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
youre welcome
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Sabor335 Featured By Owner May 11, 2013
Ok we have a drama now, so what do you have in mind for the comedy story? By the way obligatory "good one."
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GingaAkam Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Professional General Artist
I'm thinking of making the comedy into the comic thing, and not writing it (maybe after I dunno) But I'm eager to get Kage's back story written so it'll have to wait
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Sabor335 Featured By Owner May 11, 2013
Yeah about that, I'm dubious how far you'll get with that comic, just going from personal experience. I myself used to draw comics but I got out of that. My most recent commitment was a 16 chapter book, written in a spiral notebook during my senior year in high school. I have thought about writing again as well as trying a few times but the commitment wasn't there. This is all rendered moot though, because you are not me so good luck on this venture.
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Nymm-Kirimoto Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
cool
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Ravenyuuki87 Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
really good I love to read about him!
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Prucanon Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'm tearing up all ready ;_;
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MrBlack091 Featured By Owner May 11, 2013
Awww...Poor Kage ;_;
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Apersonwatches Featured By Owner May 11, 2013
*tear rolls down my cheek*
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Grace3333 Featured By Owner May 11, 2013
That must be an odd feeling to not remember anything... :c
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darkdragonqueen3000 Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Student Artist
oh my god! so epic i can't wait for more
also let me just say...aqua's creepin on yalls
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